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Tate.

His fingers were laced around me as he carried me. I had a feeling of weightlessness as he held me close to his chest like he use to when we were alive.  I bet we looked like some fucked up version of Romeo and Juliet.

I wanted to look the part. He wore the same the same thing he wore the day I asked him to shoot me in the chest. He had returned to rabbit tail to me the first Halloween, but this was our second. He had gone out of his way to find me and now here he was. Carrying me to a river in the white dress I was going to wear for him.

I was his heavy heart to carry.

"Angel I"


I shook my head. No words were needed for this. Slowly we reached the river and his feet hid the rocks with dull thuds. He didn't let me go nor did he stop as we descended into the slope, no matter how much I was weighing him.


I closed my eyes when I heard the roaring waters. His brown eyes were full of tears. I could tell because his tears were hitting me on my lips. "I asked for this," I whispered softly as the water's roar came closer. He must have nodded his head before continuing as he stood still.


I could feel the water hitting my feet and we kept going down. Down into the river's cold waters and Tate stopped only for a moment. The waters kept rising and my dress did too. "I love you," he said and my eyes snapped open as the waters crashed over my face.


I could see him from under the water as he held me down. I died in his arms this time. Our first Halloween together and he had killed me again, on my request in the white dress that I made for him.
same ghost from "everybody lies".
inspired by
dead-sweetheart.tumblr.com
and florence + the machine's song "heavy in your arms."
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xXxPunkPixiexXx Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
As everyone else who's commented has said, I love your way with imagery! I can see the whole thing in my mind perfectly! The only thing negative to say about this piece is that there was some repition in the words, like how most of the paragraphs started with the word "I". But that's just nit-picking, really.
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i-was-someone-once Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
>.< Mmmm. I usually do repetition to serve a purpose and other times I do it by accident. This one was an accident. I wasn't very happy with the outcome.
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xXxPunkPixiexXx Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It was good, you should be happy with it XD
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Karintukushi Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Student Writer
some of your grammar confused me but other than that it was lovely :)
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i-was-someone-once Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah. It was weird.
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cosmosgrl19 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
you have a gift with imagery my dear.
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i-was-someone-once Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Really?
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cosmosgrl19 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
yup :D I like reading your work because of the imagry, other than the fact you're a talented writer, of course x3
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i-was-someone-once Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lol STAPHHHHHHH :3 you're being too kind! I don't think it was too good lol.
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cosmosgrl19 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
nevah :U xD :heart:
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